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The Desperado and His Band... by ~shackell:iconshackell:

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Abort the motion, though, we like
the view. We like to look,
the wiser

Lily
de-livered
her meal as prescribed
by the prancing paediatrician (who also dabbled in explosives).

And in the right corner!

On the chrono-
graphic latency of
the date for the spacing
out of the king of beastly depths,

The desperado and his band of tiddlywinks
lead the lower tenants that complained about the smell
of the bacon, brought home under the skin
of sliver companies.

Needless,
to say that. Something
went wrong.
©2004-2009 ~shackell
:iconshackell:

Author's Comments

Full title: "The Desperado and His Band of Tiddlywinks"

12/04/2004
First Edit Details:
Apologies if this editing is bothersome, but I felt the poem seemed like it was missing something. It was the beginning, actually, that I didn’t think ended up working as the beginning anymore. To me, the simple changes made make it feel as if it were in line with the spirit of the poem and worthy of being the beginning once again. Similarly simple changes have been made to the end to help with clarity/flow.

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~damara Mar 20, 2004, 5:18:51 AM
I had to read this a few times, before the frank awesomeness struck me.

The things you do with language touch me in a way, that if my significant other touched me that way, would make me say 'Oooh, that's nice.'

You rock.

--
:pee: :toilet:

Take a second to aim, man.
:iconsomedrunkblackspoon:
!somedrunkblackspoon Mar 20, 2004, 3:27:04 PM
i am not quite sure why this tastes so good. could be the bacon. could be that nice de-livery or the dabbling in explosives. or maybe it was the fight scene. needless to say, that something that went wrong tasted sour, yet good, and was filling as well.

--
love so deep, kills you in your sleep
:iconshackell:
~shackell Mar 20, 2004, 3:46:58 PM
Ahehe... Thanks. :)

--
"...the highest forms of art are those which impose a kind of harmony and order upon the greatest possibile number of factors." - Aldous Huxley
:iconshackell:
~shackell Mar 20, 2004, 3:48:50 PM
I think it was the CGI that you'll think is corny after a decade.

--
"...the highest forms of art are those which impose a kind of harmony and order upon the greatest possibile number of factors." - Aldous Huxley
:iconsomedrunkblackspoon:
!somedrunkblackspoon Mar 20, 2004, 3:50:41 PM
haha.

--
love so deep, kills you in your sleep
:iconpsychodrive:
~psychodrive Mar 21, 2004, 11:54:21 PM
i like bacon. you know this.

--
<youthculture>AAHJ THERESN A FLY ON MY NONUEIET
<youthculture>MONITERN AAAA
:iconmyrth:
~myrth Mar 24, 2004, 2:54:06 PM
terrific fun, and another fav..
:iconshackell:
~shackell Mar 25, 2004, 9:17:43 PM
Danke, Shane.

--
"...the highest forms of art are those which impose a kind of harmony and order upon the greatest possibile number of factors." - Aldous Huxley
:iconpathetical:
~pathetical Apr 2, 2004, 1:31:10 AM
brilliant. hilarious. loved the beginning particularly.

--
I'm a girl, dammit.
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